Thursday, December 22, 2005

Where should I stand
Where should I place my heart
When every time I see you
My heart starts to jump

Keeping me calm
Keeping me sane
That’s what your smile does
Keeping me covered under the rain

Walking alone in the desert
Or lost at sea
Would be the same fate
As Life without you for me

Cherish each smile
Cherish each moment
No matter what we do
All that matters is my love for you

19 Comments:

Blogger samantha said...

Awwww! I like the poem. :) Inspired Luis?

3:52 AM  
Anonymous sheenah said...

mushy.

2:44 AM  
Blogger infinite-love said...

awww...that was such a nice poem... i can tell ur hopelesly devoted 2 this grl, whoever she is, she is one 'LUCKY GIRL'.....i know u've been thru so much pain but listen, have PATIENCE with her cuz patience lasts longer than THIRST.

well nwayz.. goodbye and GOD BLESS YOU.


REMEMBER:

Love bears all things,
believes all things,
hopes all things,
endures all things.

- I Corinthians 13 : 4 - 8


L o v e N e v e r F a i l s.

12:47 PM  
Anonymous jA said...

she must be very lucky. :)

the words are magical. where did the words come from? :P

10:35 AM  
Blogger undiscussablerealms said...

tell us more about your girl. write about life. about so many other things.:)

10:13 AM  
Blogger shanz said...

aawwww..how sweet..cheer up, luis! ^_^

4:13 PM  
Anonymous Unlucky Me said...

I can't believe this. You call this poetry? It's totally jejune. For a 24-year-old it is inane and trite, and completely lacking in poetic insight and depth. In fact it is no deeper than a smear of oil on estero water.

9:36 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

i think it is sweey... is that fro toni??.... uUuuYyYyyy....

6:33 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

i think it is sweet... is that for toni??....

6:34 PM  
Anonymous Fresh Like James said...

Yo, is it me or the skill of this dude consits of quoting stuff from MTV US and lameness? :( sorry bro but the poetry doesn't cut it.

9:35 PM  
Blogger mYsTiQuE said...

I may say that it might not be GREAT poetry but I guess fine would describe it. But it does show feelings toward the person that you could be writing about.

4:21 PM  
Anonymous Unlucky Me said...

When I criticized this poetry it was not in the light of a T.S.Eliot aura, or the poetic nuances of spoken poetry by Dylan Thomas. Those are GREAT poetry. I'm talking about poetry you read on the web. If Lucky wants to say something with feelings without coming out with bla-bla, he would do better to write a personal letter to this light of his life. In it he can express all his true feelings in a truer way - not in this pseudo grief and poetic posturizing. What's her name anyway, Rosinante? It must be because you have to be as thick-skinned as a mule to even accept such protestations of love.

9:22 PM  
Anonymous Fresh Like James said...

In plain english my peeps... the poem doesn't cut it xD - Maybe it's me but it still is borderline cheesy lameness.

Posturizing? Yes. Pseudo? Yup.

11:12 PM  
Anonymous Aencille said...

I had no idea you liked poetry. It's awesome. Sigh, I'm so hopeless whn it comes to writing poems...

7:20 PM  
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Blogger alphafemme said...

hmmm...

7:12 PM  
Blogger katrina said...

....hei!nice poem!!uhhmmm!!!and hus the lucky gurl??hehehe...

take care!!!1

2:28 PM  
Blogger psyche said...

poems are emotions in a masquerade. hope u that special someone was able to read it :)

1:32 PM  
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