Where should I stand
Where should I place my heart
When every time I see you
My heart starts to jump
Keeping me calm
Keeping me sane
That’s what your smile does
Keeping me covered under the rain
Walking alone in the desert
Or lost at sea
Would be the same fate
As Life without you for me
Cherish each smile
Cherish each moment
No matter what we do
All that matters is my love for you
Where should I place my heart
When every time I see you
My heart starts to jump
Keeping me calm
Keeping me sane
That’s what your smile does
Keeping me covered under the rain
Walking alone in the desert
Or lost at sea
Would be the same fate
As Life without you for me
Cherish each smile
Cherish each moment
No matter what we do
All that matters is my love for you
posted by luckym at 1:45 AM
13 Comments:
mushy.
she must be very lucky. :)
the words are magical. where did the words come from? :P
tell us more about your girl. write about life. about so many other things.:)
I can't believe this. You call this poetry? It's totally jejune. For a 24-year-old it is inane and trite, and completely lacking in poetic insight and depth. In fact it is no deeper than a smear of oil on estero water.
i think it is sweey... is that fro toni??.... uUuuYyYyyy....
i think it is sweet... is that for toni??....
Yo, is it me or the skill of this dude consits of quoting stuff from MTV US and lameness? :( sorry bro but the poetry doesn't cut it.
When I criticized this poetry it was not in the light of a T.S.Eliot aura, or the poetic nuances of spoken poetry by Dylan Thomas. Those are GREAT poetry. I'm talking about poetry you read on the web. If Lucky wants to say something with feelings without coming out with bla-bla, he would do better to write a personal letter to this light of his life. In it he can express all his true feelings in a truer way - not in this pseudo grief and poetic posturizing. What's her name anyway, Rosinante? It must be because you have to be as thick-skinned as a mule to even accept such protestations of love.
In plain english my peeps... the poem doesn't cut it xD - Maybe it's me but it still is borderline cheesy lameness.
Posturizing? Yes. Pseudo? Yup.
I had no idea you liked poetry. It's awesome. Sigh, I'm so hopeless whn it comes to writing poems...
hmmm...
poems are emotions in a masquerade. hope u that special someone was able to read it :)
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