another poem i made just now
Almost Perfect
From the moment you opened the door
And stepped out of your place
I was in awe of your beauty
That it made my heart skip a pace
I took you to my house
To meet my whole family
The happiness in my eyes
Because of you they clearly see
We’d be holding hands
While walking thru the park
Stopping for 5 seconds
Just to kiss in the dark
It was so beautiful
So real did it seem
The sad part is I woke up
And it was all just a dream
From the moment you opened the door
And stepped out of your place
I was in awe of your beauty
That it made my heart skip a pace
I took you to my house
To meet my whole family
The happiness in my eyes
Because of you they clearly see
We’d be holding hands
While walking thru the park
Stopping for 5 seconds
Just to kiss in the dark
It was so beautiful
So real did it seem
The sad part is I woke up
And it was all just a dream
posted by luckym at 12:51 PM
9 Comments:
Wow, you weren't kidding when you told me that this blog shows a different side of you. I like this poem though, bittersweet but it grows on you.
I know we haven't really known each other that long and that this might seem wierd for me to say it but, hang in there. It's gonna happen for you. :)
Oh my gah. That poem gave me the shivers. Ang galeng! I love reading your poems cause I can somehow relate. Keep it up dude!
-Shari
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Oh and may I suggest using Haloscan comments? It's much more effective and user-friendly. :)
blog-hopping leads me here. didnt know you're into poetry. hope you dont mind if i link you to my blog.
noringai
Well, here I am. Who knew you wrote poems? :)
May tinatago ka palang side, ha. Kitakits, pop kid.
Paloys
hahaha nagbblog ka pala.
nice. :)
lucky? a poet? that's new :)
welcome to the blogging world and i assure you you'll get a hang out of this. it will eventually become a way of life. er, maybe for geeks like me hehe!
ey wsup! just blog-hopping and the poems caught my eye. doesn't it strike you strange that creative juices flow when you're down, out of love, and out of luck? or the opposite. but never in between.
anyway, i don't know you personally, but just hang in there. sometimes, things like this happen in your life for a reason. there are just some things that you can't have at this particular moment, which you'll understand later on. this happens quite a lot to me. :) but, for now, keep writing. it's therapeutic. i'm sure in time, you'll find what you're looking for.
in the meantime, have fun with your blog. :)
hey. i'm sure everyone here adores you boy and is probably the reason why it's hard to give some constructive criticism for fear of hurting you... but someone has got to say it... sorry to burst your bubble, your *aherm* 'poetry' sucks big time... i've nothing personal against you and this is your blog so you have every right to say whatever you want but i would still like to tell you anyway, it really sucks and you can certainly improve it, i'm sure. think imagery. profundity. subtlety. cheers!
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